King Adrian
Bring me the laptop. Boys let me show you this mansion in our area in London with anything you want but the only thing is who loves me the most .
Jason
Dad I love more than my brothers and all my. Nobody in the world can imagine my love for you
King Adrian
Adam what are you going to say your brother gave a strong argument
Adam
Dad Jason may love you but he come to short on how much I love you. Dad I obviously love you the most.
King Adrian
Coner you now give your argument for the mansion in London.
Coner
Coner I have nothing to say
King Adrian
WHAT IS WRONG WITH YOU COULD HAVE ANYTHING YOU WANT AND BECOME A PROPER MAN
February 21, 2016 at 10:39 pm
Iqram, this scene captures the flow of the original. You have captured the competitiveness of the sibling very well.
Targets:
1) Your scene needs to be longer to unlock the badge.
2) You need to look at the detail of the original script and use this to flesh out your own.
3) You need to check your use of full stops and capital letters.